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Пишу сочинение за и против (содержание животных в зоопарках) , просьба исправить ошибки, если таковые имеются и сократить текст по возможности (без смысловой утраты) , т. к текст получается немного больше положенного. The advantages and
disadvantages of keeping animals in zoos.
Most people would agree that zoos are
important for the preservation of animals. However many others believe that
animals are like prisoners in zoos and that the would be happier in their
natural habitats.Unfoubtedly, this suggestion has both advantages and
disadvatages.
Keeping animals in zoos does indeed
have a lot of advantages. First of all, people can see wild, beautiful, exotic
animals. They can see how animals live and behave. Secondly, animals have good
life conditions in zoos. They do not starve because they have food and water. People
take care of animals. Moreover, animals are safe. People do not kill them. Animals
live as close to the natural habitat as possible. For instance, water and other
natural barrieres are used to separate animals from each other and from the
visitors.
On the
other hand, keeping animals in zoos is harmful for them. The animals are forced
to live in a unnatural habitat. There is not enough living space in the zoos,
when often makes animals unhappy and restless. It is also true that, some
animals do not proliferate in zoos. Secondly, animlas should live in freedom,
because it is their natural habitat. Moreover, animals in the zoos live under
stress. The worst thing is that animals in the zoos will never be able to
exsist in their natural habitat alone. They have will not any chance to survive.
In conclusion, it seems that keeping
wild animals in zoos is more benefical than harmful. I think that it is
profitable for all animals, because they have good protection. They can feel safe.

Александр П. · Accepted Answer

The advantages and disadvantages of keeping animals in zoos. 
 
Most people would agree that zoos are important for the preservation of animals. However many others believe that animals are like prisoners in zoos and would be more happy in their natural habitats. Unfoubtedly, this suggestion has both advantages and disadvatages. 
Keeping animals in zoos does indeed have a lot of advantages. First of all, people can see wild, beautiful, exotic animals. They can see how animals live and behave. Secondly, animals have good life conditions in zoos. People take care of animals, the animals are safe. People do not kill them. Animals live as close to the natural habitat as possible. For instance, water and other natural barrieres are used to separate animals from each other and from the visitors. 
On the other hand, keeping animals in zoos is harmful for them, since they are forced to live in an unnatural habitat. There is not enough living space in the zoos, and this makes animals unhappy and restless. It is also true that some animals do not proliferate in zoos. The worst thing is that animals in the zoos would never be able to exsist in their natural habitat alone. 
I think that keeping wild animals in zoos is more benefical than harmful and that it is profitable for all animals, because they have good protection. They can feel safe.