правильный ли перевод? это сочинение я написала на английском (см. внутри), есть ли ошибки?

Очень хорошо!

It's never late to learn.
People learn all life long. People start understanding things around them in early childhood.
We perceive the information THROUGH communication with the world.
People learn first life's lessons in childhood and keep learning throughout their lives.
Parents, kindergarten, school, society are the main sources of knowledge about the world.
As a rule, a PERSON starts STUDYING IN childhood, but there ARE many cases, when one has no possibilities FOR THAT. THE REASONS CAN BE DIFFERENT, for example – war, poverty, and many others.
but no matter, when a person decides to study, it's an absolutely right decision, because knowledge is useful for any of us and it can be very helpful when one is ready for it.
Another important thing is that regardless of how much you know, your base of knowledge can always be improved, enlarged and your life’s skills can be perfected.
It’s obviously that there is no limit for achievement of perfection in any fields of knowledge.
It’s impossible to comprehend an immense thing, and the knowledge is such a thing: very fascinating and enigmatic immensity.

glavnaya problema vashego perevoda - ego neveroiatnaya rusificirovannost'. nel'z'a perevodit' slovo v slovo. vy dolzhny ispol'zovat' angl. sinyaksicheskie oboroty i konsrukcii, a ne russkie. ideia bezlichnosti v angl. vyrazhaets'a 3m licom (they, people, one, a person), v otlichie ot russkogo 2go i 1go lica (my, vy, ty). + ia ispravila tvoi gram. oshibki.

Вроде бы все хорошо