Исправьте пожалуйста грамматические ошибки. Учу анг. всего 3 месяца.

Question

Autobiography 
 
My name is Zulfiya. My full name is Djuraeva Zulfiya Baratovna. 
I was born on the 25th of January, 1975, in Тashkent 
I was born in the family of the office-workers. 
My family is not small. There are four of us .I am married. 
My husband Ismail is also thirty eight years old. 
My children-Aziz and Sarvar. They study at school. 
My mother and father are pensioners. 
I have three brothers. They are engineers. 
 I have a sister. She is disabled the first group. She 
She is ill with Parkinson's disease 
 When I was 7, I went to school. I did well at school. 
I was especially good at math and geometry. 
I finished my school in 1992. In 1992 I entered 
Institute of Communication and graduated from it in 
1997. Then I worked as a hairdresser. 
In 2003 I entered Medical Academy and graduated from it in 2010. This years I entered master degree on specialty of infectionist. My supervisor is Lola Djalilovna. My master degree project is” The efficacy of glycyrrhizic acid in treatment of chronic hepatitis C” 
I think the profession of a doctor is very interesting and useful to people.

Nura Ledi · Accepted Answer

Я ошибок не нашел, и грамматически все правильно. Но сам по себе текст скуден. Но для 3 месяцев занятий неплохо.

Анас Эль Сайед · Answer

Единственное что, In A family of office-workers. Потому что оба слова еще не употреблялись в тексте до этого. 
Следовательно, артикль а (an) (во множественном числе существительного не ставится) 
My children ARE Aziz and Sarvar. Лучше sons (сыновья)

Дмитрий Сидоров · Answer

in the family of office-workers. 
the profession of a doctor - the medical profession 
 
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