Лингвисты, исправьте ошибки, пожалуйста)))

Question

I would like to ask you to consider this suggestion, to take park in work of camp and to note down this event in your Calendar of events.

in THE work of camp

Макс Синицын · Accepted Answer

, to take part in the work of the camp and note...

Мария Разживина · Answer

I would like to ask you to consider this suggestion, to take part in the work of camp and to note down this fact in your Calendar of events. 
так лучше. event in your Calendar of events. как то с повтореникм звучит не очень. всегда, если идёт повторение слова, ищите синоним

Илья · Answer

ну я маленько заню английский там короче нет ошибок