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Yesterday my Mum asked me to help her about the house. We were very busy with cleaning up after the birthday party the whole morning. I got quite tired and even missed my fitness class. What are your family duties, if any? Is there anything you especially like or dislike about house work? Do you find helping your parents necessary, why or why not?

Oh, I have some great news! I got a lovely kitten for my birthday...

Sochi

Russia.

02.06.2014

Diar Jane,

Thanks for your letter. It was lovely to hear from you.

You asked me about family duties. My duties is house cleaning, damp cleaning and dishes washing. Especially I do not like to wash dishes. Of course we should help parents. If you take away together cleaning runs faster.By the way, I am very happy for you.

How passed your birthday? What color kitten? When will you come to me?

Well, I have to go now. Looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Love,

Marina

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Евгений Муравьёв · Accepted Answer

Yesterday my Mum asked me to help her around the house. After the birthday party we cleaned up the whole morning and were very busy with it. I was rather tired and I had even missed my fitness class. What are your domestic affairs? Is there anything you especially like or dislike? Do you find helping your parents necessary, why or why not?

Oh I have some great news! I have got a lovely kitten for my birthday...

Sochi

Russia.

02.06.2014

Dear Jane,

Thanks for your letter. I was happy to hear from you.

You asked me about my domestic affairs. My domestic affairs are house cleaning, rubbish cleaning and dish washing. Especially I do not like dish washing (или можно написать: Especially I do not like the latter.) Of course we should help our parents. If you tidy up together cleaning runs faster. By the way I am very happy for you.

How did you spend your birthday? I will look forward to hearing from you soon.

With love,

Marina