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Nowadays, more and more people choose to enter university or college after they have completed the study in high school. People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). In my view, career preparation and self-actualization are two main reasons that so many people consider attending university or college.
People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge).
But not everyone has the opportunity to study at the university. Some people want to start a career after high school because they have to earn money for a living. Also, a person can start a family, then will be harder to learn. But this is not always.
The first thing that perhaps anyone would think about going to college is to get a higher level of education. Another good reason for going to college is that you can get practical and valuable experiences while studying at college. So, this is also where they’ll get to know new people, experience new things and prepare for the life in the future.
In my opinion, it is necessary to go to university, then start a career.