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After high school, entering on the threshold of a new life, young people are often faced with a difficult decision: to continue living with their parents or to start living independently in a separate apartment. Some people say that in this age of "children" are not prepared for the difficulties of daily life, others that eighteen-year-olds may well take care of themselves.

Personally, I believe that in this age young people are not so aware of the correctness of their decisions and are not prepared for an independent life at least from this side. Not all of them are trained in even the theory, let alone practice. Support for parents at this age is very important and therefore, to leave the family home - not a good idea. Just one of the important arguments against separate living graduates is their financial insecurity. They are not able to earn enough money to afford to keep even the most modest apartment.

However, proponents of the opposite view maintain that independent living can bring some experience to young people, which is extremely valuable and will need them in the future adult life.

While this is, to some extent, though, I'm sure that after leaving school young people should focus on higher education, but not on the construction of independent living.

In conclusion, I want to say that a person should start independent life after securing a steady income, so not wise for young people to start living separately from their parents immediately after graduation.