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Youth choice
Every generation has different priorities. My grandparents recovered the Earth from the world’s biggest war, my parents raised demographics. What do people my age want? I am going to talk about modern teenagers and their career choices.
Firstly, they are perspective and want money. This graph easily proofs it: these jobs usually mean a high salary, most of them are about ambitions and a complex education.
Secondly, young people obviously ache to travel a lot in their future. Some of this professions permit them to be wherever they want to.
Thirdly, a large number of youth wishes justice. Consequently 44 percent of them prefer to be judges.
In spite of the fact that present teenager’s trend to get a highly paid occupation and to develop themselves by seeing the world is good, there is a problem with everything aforementioned. At one blow begs the question: who is going to do all the underpaid job if the modern generation is more into money? Now I find two solutions. The first one is to raise all the salaries, which sounds like an impossible dream. The second one is to make our youth interested in what they are doing, not how much money they get for it. Agree that the second plan sounds more feasibly. I believe that schools can make career guidance lessons.
In conclusion, I am going to tell my view. I am glad that we have a free and ambitious generation, that wants to be fair, independent, and travel. I deem that career development vividly expresses a person's readiness for difficulties, firmness of their character. (267 words)

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