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4. Applying for a Job
You are looking for a part-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter:
•introduce yourself
•explain what sort of job you would like
•say what experience and skills you have
Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir / Madam
You should write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
(Question taken from Instant IELTS by Guy Brook-Hart)

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am looking for a part -time job in the field of accounting. One of my friends recommended you to me as a very reputable employment agency.
My name is Pamela Robins. I have recently graduated from the University with a bachelor's degree in accounting with excellence. As I am doing my master's degree I decided to work part-time as an assistant of an accountant in a small firm. It would be very convenient to work twenty hours a week.
Besides good knowledge of accounting I am a fluent English speaker and know a smattering of French. I am a confident user of a computer and passed international computers exams a year ago. During summer holidays I had a practice in one of the multinational company.
I am attaching a CV where you can find the detailed information about all my skills and experience. If you have any vacancies in your database who fulfill my requirements You would be ably to contact with me through contacts stated in my attached CV.
Thank you for your attention.
I am looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Pamela Robins