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Hello Darya,
Your English really is excellent, and most of what you wrote is understandable. But there are some mistakes, so I corrected them for you.

A shiver ran through the skin. = I felt shivers run down my spine

During the concert, heart pounding, my knees were shaking = During the concert, my heart was pounding and my knees were shaking

Music permeates the entire body = the music permeated through my body
The first song I heard was the "star" on TV = capitalize the "S" in the word "Star"

Impressions from the concert were in for a long time = the impressions I got out of the concert will last a long time (or better: a lifetime, то есть, for the rest of my life.)

Oliver had a bass voice, but at the same time it was gentle = Oliver had a deep voice, but at the same time it was gentle.

You have a very sad songs they help me calm down and think = your songs are very sad; they help me calm down and think.

You do not need to write dozens of pages you express all in one song. = You don't need to write dozens of pages to express your message; you are able to do that in just one song. It's a real talent!

In an interview to read about you. I read about how the three of you to skip class and Oliver almost kicked out of the sixth grade. = In an interview I saw, I read about how the three of you skipped class and Oliver almost got kicked out of the sixth grade (or better: "expelled from the sixth grade (отчислить) ; suspended from the sixth grade (исключить из школы на временный срок)

I want to wish success to your wonderful music group = I wish you and your wonderful band success.

I do not know what I would have done if it had not found you. = I don't know what I would've done if I hadn't found you.

you are my great musicians. = you are great musicians
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