Кто хорошо знает англ, помогите, пожалуйста, найти ошибки в моих предложениях, особенно в употреблении слов

With years passing Dorian was getting more selfish and cruel.
He offended people, committed crimes. He killed his friend.
For many years he didn't get older, but his picture kept changing.
The man on the picture was getting older and his face looked even meaner.
But Dorian was still young.

year by year Dorian became...
he offended... once he had kill this friend
hi didn't get old for many years...
так чуть лучше будет, хотя для школьной работы сойдет, другого от вас и не ждут

With aging Dorian became more selfish and more cruel-вот так будет лучше.
During many years he didn't get older,but the pucture of Dorian did.-На протяжении многих лет он не старел (становился старше), а портрет Дориана-да.
В последнем абзаце не bacame,a became.Все остальное вроде верно. А что такое pulled crimes?

BECAME

It's still Dre Day nigga, A.K. nigga
Before I chrome the lot, can't keep it home a lot
'cause when I frequent the spots that I'm known to rock
You hear the bass from the trunk when I'm on the block
Ladies, they pay homage, but haters say Dre fell off
How nigga My last album was "The Chronic"
They want to know if he still got it
They say rap's changed, they want to know how I feel about it