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Television became the essential part of our life/ It is important mass media, knowledge source and leisure pass time. Modern children watch TV and play video games from childhood. And sometimes do it too much.
On one hand, if the children and teenagers watch TV, they can discover and learn many new, interesting and useful things, like scientific facts, historical and cultural realities etc. According to some experts, with the help of video and computer games it is possible to develop logical thinking, erudition, expand circle of interest, improve memory. For example, my friend plays in quests, and he has such useful qualities that fast reaction, concentration, ability to find the way out of difficult situation. Thus playing video games and watching television in one's spare time can be considered good and useful pastime.
On the other hand, watching TV and playing computer games too excessive may bring damage to physical, psychological and mental health, like headache, a decrease of acuity, irritability, insomnia and so on. Also, computer games replace reality, that because American association of Psychiatrists includes gambling addiction in the list of mental disorders. I can illustrate this in one example in my experience. There was a boy in my class in primary school, who spent too much of his free time by playing computer games. He was very aggressive, emotionally labile, nervous and very difficult to communicate. so, can be concluded, that it is bad to spend much time to playing video games and watching TV. And instead of it it is necessary to find more productive activities, which can bring some benefits. It may be different art exercises, kinds of sports, learning something intellectual development etc.
To summarize, can be said that playing computer games and watching TV have positive and negative sides. In my opinion, everything is good in moderation. And everyone should know when to stop. Althoug the border between "much" and "too much" is often difficult to determine.
Алибек Бурбаев
Алибек Бурбаев
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Television has become an essential part of our life. It is an important kind of mass media. It educates and is also a way to spend your pastime. Modern children watch TV and play video games from their childhood. And sometimes they do it too much.

On the one hand, if children and teenagers watch TV, they can discover and learn many new, interesting and useful things, like scientific facts, historical and cultural realities etc. According to some experts, with the help of video and computer games it is possible to develop logical thinking, erudition, widen the range of interests and improve the memory span. For example, my friend is into quests. As a result, he has developed such useful qualities as ability to respond swiftly, concentration and ability to find the way out of a difficult situation. Thus playing video games and watching television in one's spare time can be considered a good and useful pastime.

On the other hand, excessive watching TV and playing computer games may bring damage to one's physical, psychological and mental health and result in headaches, problems with the eyesight (если a decrease of acuity - это острота зрения у вас), being irritable, insomnia and so on. Also, computer games place a player in an alternative reality. This is why American Association of Psychiatrists has included gaming addiction in the list of mental disorders. I can illustrate this with an example from my own experience. There was a boy in my primary school class who spent too much of his free time playing computer games. He was very aggressive, emotionally unstable, nervous and very difficult to communicate with. So we can conclude that it is bad to spend too much time playing video games and watching TV. Instead, people should find more productive activities that benefit them. We can name art, doing sports, learning something new among such hobbies.

To sum it up, playing computer games and watching TV have both advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, everything is good in moderation. And everyone should know when to stop. Althoug the border between "much" and "too much" is often difficult to determine.

но если тема у вас про телевизор, то не очень понятно, при чём тут игры на компьютере.
gambling - это когда в казино играют, на деньги :) я заменила на gaming.
повторю, что ТВ тут явно лишнее, про него ничего не говорится по сути.
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Алибек Бурбаев Спасибо большое) Вы просто святой человек))
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Television has (long) become AN essential part of our life.
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On THE one hand, if (the) children and teenagers watch TV...

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