Ко может проверить и дать рекомендации? сочинение агнл Pre-intermediate

Most people have "h"obbies and interests which each of them prefer doing in their SPARE time. As for me, I don't have a lot of free time, especially during the week. However, in the weekend [COMMA] I try to do what I really enjoy to do. USUALLY [COMMA] I go to the University five days a week, studying, AND working. In my SPARE time [COMMA] I like to play computer games and hang out with my friends. I plan my weekends in advance. If I have no plans, my friends usually SUGGEST something interesting. I know that British teenagers spend their leisure time differently, for example, playing football, riding horses, taking care of P[p]ets, going H[h]iking or to theme parks [COMMA] etc. I PLAY very little sports BECAUSE I have some health problems.

Nowadays [COMMA] fast food restaurants ARE open everywhere-from big megalopolises to small towns. They have their advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, McDonalds, KFC and Subway help us save our money and time, but, on the other hand, they do not offer [NO us] healthy meals. Hamburgers, cheeseburgers, fries, muffins, and milk cocktails are tasty [NO COMMA] but not very good for our health and figure. I do not go to fast food restaurants. If we want to live long, we should pay attention to what we eat. A healthy diet usually includes a lot of fruit and vegetables, regular portions of fish or white meat, grains, nuts and a few liters of water per day. If is better to choose products without artificial ingredients and with minimal quantity of sugar.

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