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I;ve recently learned that our old snack bar is about to be replaced by a bigger and better self-service cafeteria. I hope that the cafeteria will be convenient and attractive. This news makes me very glad and I would like to give some suggestions which will help cafeteria become more popular among the visitors.
Firstly, it would be a good idea to increase the number of places because there are not enough places in the old snack bar. The increase of the number of places will increase the number of visitors.
Secondly, I would recommend to make the cafeteria menu more various because there are few dishes on te menu of the snack bar. It will also affect the number of visitors.
Lastly, I would suggest not to make prices higher because it will reduce the number of visitors. I understand that after the snack bar will be replaced by the cafeteria the prices will grow, but I hope not much.
The old snack bar was for us students a place where we liked to spend time. We hope that the new cafeteria of self-service will justify all our best expectations.

К ответу А. Музыченко:

This news makes me very glad and I would like to give some suggestions which will help the cafeteria to become more popular among the visitors.

Lastly, I would suggest not to make prices higher because the high prices could reduce the number of visitors.

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