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Monday is the hardest day in the week, because we have many(заменить) lessons. The easiest day is Friday, because we have very short school day. We have bresk (такого слова нет) after all(заменить) lesson, but the bresks(такого слова нет) are very short. The bresks (такого слова нет) last ( а не lost) five ( а не fre) minutes. after school we usually (usual)y play with snow and chat,but sometimes we go to(вставить) do moll and look around. First lesson last (см. выше) 45 minutes and our schooldays end at(вставить) 2 o'clock...

The hardest day is Monday because we have the most number of lessons.The easiest day is Friday because we have the shortest school day. We have a break after every lesson, but the breaks are very short. The breaks last three minutes. After school we usually play with snow and chat, but sometimes we go to walk and look around. First lesson lasts 45 minutes and our schooldays end at 2 o'clock....

Примечание: там было слово "moll", что означает "шлюха, уличная девка". Конечно, это была описка!

1 предл. a lot of lessons
3 предлож. We have a break after every lesson, but the breaks are very short. The breaks last free minutes. After school we always play snowballs and chat but sometimes to malls and walking along. First lesson lasts 45 minutes and our schooldays end at 2 o'clock. In result I can say that it is too hard to be a student today.

We have "break" after "every" lesson, but the "breaks"...
The "breaks" lost "three" minutes ...eto predlozhenie voob4e ne pravilno.

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The breaks lost three minutes - eto ubrat nado.
prosto " After school we "usually" play with snow and chat, but sometimes we go (to) do (a) moll and look around" -
"we go do moll and look around" - ya dumayu eto ne pravilno potomu chto eto ne mog napisat' shkolnik. No sprosite ego chto on imel etim vvidu.

"First lesson lost 45 minutes and our schooldays end 2 oclock"
ya dumayu on imeet vvidu eto
"One lesson takes 45 minutes and our schooldays end at 2 o'clock. "- Odin urok prodolzhaetsya 45 minut i nashi shkolnie dni konchayutsya v 2 chasa

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