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The cost of air travel now rely(relies?) on the income from tourists (is -лишнее?)
They travel to see another countries (other)
to meet new people итд (вместо different везде)
to have a good(great)time) from another countries
in thouse places
growth of (иместо in) не претендую на истину,просто мое мнение,в целом хорошо