Люди, в совершенстве знающие английский язык либо проживающие за границей! Загляните, пожалуйста, к вам вопрос!

Я понимаю, что всех задолбали вопросы школьников о том, как сделать домашнее задание. Но я не прошу ничего делать за меня. Данное сочинения я целиком и полностью написал сам, но, зная свои серьезные проблемы с английской грамматикой я хотел бы попросить вас хотя бы бегло просмотреть его на наличие каких-либо вопиющих ошибок, ведь в этом мне никто не может помочь. Пожалуйста, выполните мои просьбу! Очень не хотелось бы облажаться. Is it easy to be young? I think that this question is rather difficult. Theme of responsibility of the youth was told too much and I would not repeat this words like “Youth must increase the greatness of our Motherland” and so forth. Certainly, youth must love his land and be ready to protect it, but I think, that every young guy or girl must realize his responsibility for himself and his family. Youth is the age of happiness and freedom, but any mistake in this period can spoil the whole life. Youth is the age temptations and not every man can resist against them. One of these temptations is drugs. Despite the social promotion against them, their popularity does not fall. For a long period of time many musicians which were the idols of the youth loaded the drugs and made the masses of young men to do it. Only deaths of a many young people made idols of millions to understand, that they must feel their responsibility. Now they often undertake activities calling the youth do not even try the drugs. Another common problem of youth is misunderstood by the elder generation. Unfortunately this problem cannot be solved, because it does not solved by people for thousand years. Of course this rule has his exceptions, but they are too few. It is especially bad when misunderstanding destroys the contact between parents and children. This fact along with other problems (for example, at the school, or in personal life) often becomes the cause leaving home or joining in any subculture. In my opinion, joining in subculture is not always bad accident (in a practice, many of the teenagers, included in any subculture became a much more decent people, then others). So, I have listed not problems and difficulties of young people, but I think, that the time to answer the main questions has came: it is easy to be young, but it isn`t easy at all to do not do something, which can spoil the long life, following after this nice period. Скажите, какого рода мои ошибки? Они грубые относительно 11 класса профильного уровня? Трудно ли мне будет поступить на журналистику? Какую оценку поставит учитель? Пожалуйста, не игнорируйте, это очень важно!