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My role model IS Isaac Newton, HE IS number one IN physics. I'll tell YOU a little about_ Isaac Newton, one of the greatest men in the history of science. HE was born in a little village in England in 1642. When Isaac was nineteen he became a student of Cambridge University. He began to study physics, astronomy and mathematics. Newton openED the law of motion and the universal law of gravitation . This _law was unknown before Newton's work. Hearts of people all over the world, he did a important thing.
последнее предложение непонятно и обратите внимание на ошибки
p/s если хотите, начните так:
Almost everyone has a role model in their live and I am not an exception. а потом продолжайте удачи!!!

My role model IS Isaac Newton, but number one for physics (это предложение вообще не имеет смысла) . I'll tell YOU (после tell обязательно дополнение) a little about it Isaac Newton. One of the greatest men in the history of science was born in a little village in England in 1642. When Isaac was nineteen he became a student of Cambridge University. He began to study physics, astronomy and mathematics. Newton openED the law of motion and the universal law of gravitation . This law was unknown before Newton's work. Hearts of people all over the world, he did a important thing (Здесь тоже просто набор слов, не ясно, что хотели сказать вы или переводчик :)))).

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