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Computers can`t replace books. Would/do you agree?

TODAY, it MAY certainly seem THAT books are a thing of the past, but are they?
JUST Imagine! It`s A summer day, you are sitting IN the open air in A comfortable chair with your favorite book. The weather is wonderful and you ARE really enjoyING reading. Your fingers slowly turn THE pages, you feel relaxed .
And NOW TRY TO VISUALIZE what it WOULD be LIKE,if instead of reading A book you`ll be sitting in your room opposite A/YOUR computer. Your eyes are tired, your back and neck hurt(ARE STIFF) and you FEEL UNCOMFORTABLE sitting in the same place. I suppose it`s not what you wanT (IS THAT WHAT YOU WOULD PREFER?)
Of course THE computer HAS A LOT of different functions, but it will never PROVIDE us WITH such an excellent way of RELAXATION books DO.
And by the way it`s so much better to read books if you`re looking for serious information or when you`re studying. By the time a book goes to press it has been through the hands of the author, publisher, designer and the editor. Information in the Internet doesn`t UNDERgo such a long and difficult process. With very little effort anyone can publish/PUT a document on the Internet, anyone can beCOME an author. As a result there is so much low quality literature and texts on the internet and THERE'S NO guarantee that you choоse REALLY good ones for reading.
FINALLY, IT'S common KNOWLEDE that computerS AFFECT your PHYSICAL AS WELL AS MENTAL health, eyes, back, muscles SUFFER most.
So I hope THE computer will never replace books and people will chose to spEND their time with a good book, rather than their computer.

Computer - исчисляемое существительное, не забывайте артикль. Если вы говорите о нем в родовом смысле, the, если о своем, чем-то частном, a/the по обстоятельствам.
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people will choОse

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And then imagine what would it be, if - And then imagine what it would be, if - это же не вопрос, нужен прямой порядок слов

you are sitting on the open air - you are sitting outside

your back and neck hurts - your back and neck hurt - их же двое :)

computer is a great resort of different functions - эээ, переформулировать бы

that computer had a bad influence - that computer has a bad influence (лучше affects your health)

than near the computer - than near a computer

P.S. Да, и заголовок у вас нелогичный. Либо: Computers can replace books. Do you think so? либо: Computers can`t replace books. Don't you think so?

Computers can’t replace books. Do you think so?

In our time it may seem that The Book Age is long gone by! But is it really by?
Imagine! It`s summer day and you are sitting in a comfortable chair somewhere outdoors with your favorite book in hands. The weather is wonderful and you really enjoy reading. Your fingers slowly turn over the pages, and you feel relaxed, at ease.
And now imagine what it would be like, if instead of reading a book you`ll be sitting in your room facing your computer. Your eyes are tired, your back and neck are aching and you`re sick and tired of sitting motionless in one place. I suppose it`s not what you really want!
Who would argue that a computer offers a lot of help and many useful functions, but it will never offer that excellent way of rest like books can offer.
And by the way it`s so much better to read books if you`re looking for serious information or when you need it for education. By the time a book goes to the printing press it has to go through the hands of the author, publisher, designer and editor. Information in the Internet doesn’t go that long and difficult way to reach the reader. It doesn’t take much effort to place a document on the Internet, and anyone can become the author. As a result there is so much low quality information and many texts on the internet and you can`t be sure, that you are reading what you really need.
Besides it`s common knowledge, that the computer has a bad influence on your health, especially your eyes, back and muscles and even your psychological health.
So I hope the computer will never replace the book and people will chose to spare their time for leisure and profit reading a good book, rather than chase the skipping web-pages staring at the monitor.

Computers can`t replace books. Do you think so?

In the current age it certainly may seem like books are a thing of the past, but are they?
Imagine! It`s A summer day, you are sitting IN the open air in A comfortable chair with your favorite book. The weather is wonderful and you really enjoy reading. Your fingers slowly overturn pages, you feel relaxed and rested.
And then imagine what COULD it be, if instead of reading A book you`ll be sitting in your room opposite the computer. Your eyes are tired, your back and neck HURT and you`re annoyed by sitting AT the same place. I suppose it`s not what you want!
Of course A computer is a great resort of different functions, but it will never give us such an excellent way of rest like books.
And by the way it`s so much better to read books if you`re looking for serious information or when you`re studying. By the time a book goes to press it has PASSED through the hands of the author, publisher, designer and the editor. Information in the Internet NEEDN'T go through such a long and difficult process. With a very little effort anyone can publish a document on the Internet, anyone can be an author. As a result there is so much literature and texts of a low quality on the internet and you can`t have any guarantee, that you chose good ones for reading.
And it`s a common fact, that computer had a bad influence on your health, especially eyes, back, muscles and psychological health.
So I hope computer will never replace books and people will choose to spare their time rather with a good book, than near the computer.

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