Помогите пжста с английским!я правильно написал?

Да, мне тоже понравилось. Какой целеустремленный молодой человек!

Certainly, all want to get the best work which lie in performance of anything and earn many money. I think that the most important thing in the general work consists that you should love really it and get up with good mood every day and go to your office with a smile in your person.
Than I would like to become? This question puzzles me very much. As I study the Chinese culture, I want, that my future work has been connected with the Chinese and Chinese language also. After reception of higher education of my university I want to go to China to receive the second higher education in economy. I also want to work abroad probably in China and a back home from time to time to see my parents and friends. I believe that I am able work as the translator from knowledge of economy or the businessman with knowledge of the Chinese language. It means that I do not want to be the usual translator, but I can probably carry on negotiations or something as this. I like this idea because I believe that this kind of work demands dialogue with people and as I am a talkative person, I think that I will be capable to it.
Today I have a brief experience as the private teacher and I think that is more than experience, we receive more possibilities in work of improvement which we will have, thus, to me really it will be pleasant to teach, but I do not want to do this all life.
I dream to have work of flexible hours and to visit my office only sometimes since nine to five work at the office of a material sitting ahead, the computer not for me. I think that there should be a competent, qualified, talkative, hardworking, clever, polite, brought up person to receive this kind of work. I also want to be advanced so, I should catch quickly the new information and make more than I can. I want to get well paid work to support my parents.

Of course, everyone wants to get the best job which means doing nothing and making lots of money. I think that the most important thing in everyone’s job is that you should really love it and get up in a good mood every day and go to your office with a smile on your face.
What I would like to become? This question puzzles me greatly. (Звучит немного как Йода :) можно заменить на a lot ) As I study Chinese culture I want my future job to be connected with China and Chinese language as well. After graduating from my University I'd like to go to China to get the second degree - in economics. Also I want to work abroad maybe in China and to go back home from time to time to see my parents and friends. I believe that I will be able to work as an interpreter with the knowledge of economics or to be a business man with the knowledge of Chinese. It means that I don’t want to be a regular interpreter but maybe I could hold negotiations or something like that. I like this idea because I see this kind of job as demanding a dialogue with people and being a sociable person I think that I will be good at it.
Today I have (если имеется в виду, что сейчас, к настоящему моменту, то лучше убрать today) a little experience as a private teacher and I think the more experience we get the more opportunities in getting better job we will have, so I really like to teach but I don’t want to do this all my life.
I dream to have a flexible work schedule and to be at my office only occasionally since nine-to-five office job and sitting in front of my computer is not for me. I think that I need to be well qualified, skilled, sociable, hardworking, intelligent, polite, well mannered person to land this kind of job. Also I want to be promoted so I should quickly catch a new information and to do more than I can (??? делать больше, чем я могу?? ?Did you mean "as much as I can? "). I want to get well-paid job to support my parents.

Все правильно, хорошо написали, Вы молодец. Одно мелкое замечание: слово skilful пишется через одно L
Дерзайте, Бог Вам в помощь.

нормально. Артикль "a" перед interprenter нужен и предлог "of" перед a computer в словосочетании in front a computer. Также артикль "a" перед a high. Артикль относится к существительному person. Обрати внимание на неопределенный артикль. В тексте есть еще один пропуск артикля "a"

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