Вопрос тем, кто хорошо владеет английским. (+)

...I am an old fan....
Could you please give me some link to listen it or send me an e-mail if that's not too much to ask

Thank you in advance for your attention

Я бы написал так:
Dear Sirs,
I am an old fan of your music and would like to listen to your "Violent Storm" album. Regretfully I can not find it anywhere. Could you kindly give me a link in order to download it. You may send the same to me via the e-mail if possible.
Thanking you in advance,
yours truly
(имя-рек)

Hello, dear musicians. **I'M** the old fan of **metal music** and would like to listen your album "Violent Storm", but I can't find it anywhere. Please, give me the link to it or send on an e-mail if will not strongly complicate.
My e-mail - [ссылка на мыло потом появится] -)))))))))))))))))))))))))))
In advance many thanks.

оставить в конце только thanks

Dear band members,

I am an old fan of your music and was wondering if you could kindly provide me with a link to your album "Violent Storm"? The reason I am asking is that I am having difficulty locating it on the web.

If you could email the link to me, that would be great. My email address is below.

(адрес почты)

I look forward to hearing from you soon,

Thank you!

Dunkelheit

Hello, dear musicians. I the old fan of metal and i would like to listen your album "Violent Storm", but I can't find it anywhere. Please, give me the link to it or send on the e-mail if will not strongly complicate.
My e-mail - [ссылка на мыло потом появится]
In advance many thanks.

Hello, dear musicians. I the old fan of metal and would like to listen your album "Violent Storm", but I can't find it anywhere. Please, give me the link to it or send on the e-mail if will not trouble you.
My e-mail -
Thanks in advance.

- am an old fan вместо the old fan
- listen to вместо listen
- Could you please give me a link to listen to it вместо please, give me the link to it
- or send it via E-mail if it's not too much trouble вместо or send on e-mail if will not strongly complicate
- Many thanks in advance - поменять местами слова в финальной фразе
Исправить, что указано, остальное можно оставить без изменений.
Из всех ответов выше адекватен только вариант Inesh. Ответы остальных товарищей изобилуют ошибками.

насколько мне позволяет моё знание английского, ошибок я не увидела. )
ах, да, как уже исправил Семен, вместо an - the.