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The question about dating shows is very interesing. There is a great deal of different opinions on this (problem) and they all can be divided into two groups. Some people think that dating shows on TV help men and women to understand each other better, however, other(people) are sure that such AN activity is just a waste of time.
I hold the second opinion. Firstly, two people WHO WANT to get to know each other better need more time that THE time of broadcast. Secondly, under the cameras people can be very CONSTRAINED WHICH makeS their communication laboured.
However, some people believe that dating shows help people to come to terms (договориться, примириться с чем-л.?) . They are sure of the fact that people who met(meet) on a TV show will get on more intimate terms after airtime and may be even married although THE show doesn't reveal people's characters (или хотя бы the nature).
To conclude( to summarize, to sum it all up), participation in a dating show is good to come into the spotlight but it is almost impossible to find your love there .

Надо взять за правило рассмотреть КАЖДОЕ существительное на необходимость артикля. Одно и то же слово в разных значениях может его или требовать или не требовать. Артиклей не хватает катастрофически.

The question about dating shows is very interesTing. There is a great deal of different opinions on this problem and they all can be divided into two groups. Some people think that dating shows on TV help men and women to KNOW each other better, however, the others THINK that such activity is just a waste of time.
TO MY MIND IF two people WANT to get to know each other BETTER they need more time that time of broadcast. AT THE SAME TIME under the cameras people can be very restrictive and it makeS a communication HARD.
However, some people believe that dating shows help people to come to terms. They BELIEVE that people who met on a TV show will be on terms of intimacy after airtime and may be even GET married although THE show doesn't reveal full nature of people.
To FINISH, participation in a dating show is A good ground TO come into the spotlight but TO find love over there is almost impossible.

Some people think that dating shows on TV help men and women to understand each other better, however, the others are sured that such activity is just a waste of time. - лучше разбить на два предложения.
Firstly, for two people to get to know better each other, they need more time that time of broadcast. - согласуйте предложение и составьте его ПРАВИЛЬНО
it make a communication - it makeS communication
They are sure of the fact that....-they a sure IN fact that...
....who met on a TV show will be on terms of intimacy....-who met on a TV show ARE on terms of intimacy....
reveala - ?
To conclude лучше заменить на So. To conclude употребляют в основном в официальных речах и в документации.
good ground for come into the spotlight - либо good ground TO come into the spotlight, либо good ground for comING into the spotlight

The question about the dating shows is very interesing. There is a great deal of different opinions on this problem and they all can be divided into two groups. Some people think that the dating shows on TV help men and women to understand each other, however, the others are assured that such activity is just a waste of time.
I hold the second opinion. First of all, for two people to get to know each other better, they need more time than it's provided during the broadcast. Secondly, under the cameras people can be very restricted and it makes their communication laboured.
However, some people believe that dating shows help people to come to terms. They are sure of the fact that people who have met on a TV show will be on terms of intimacy after airtime and may be even married although the show doesn't reveal a full nature of people.
In conclusion, participation in a dating show is a good ground for people to come into the spotlight but to find love over there is almost impossible.

На взгляд, текст хороший. Но слишком много that. и "...to get to know better each other..." better поставить последним. и вот это не очень нравится "...more time that time of broadcast." it makeS- в последней строчки 2ого абзаца. TO find love over there is almost impossible.