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I’d like to tell you a few words about the history of my family. This question has always fascinated me. While I was a little girl, I looked with deep interest at the old black-and-white photographs on which my ancestors were sealed, listened to the stories of my grandmothers about their childhood spent in one of the villages of the Belarusian Polesie - Adasi.
But unfortunately human memory is short-lived. And in my store don’t keep all of stories which told by my great-grandmother Vera and mother of my mother, grandmother Klava. Several years ago they both died. And this dull bitter feeling comes to me from the realization that I can no longer ask them personally a lot.
My second grandmother, Klava's sister, Toma is still alive. She is always willing to give me time and help to understand the question of where our roots originate. However, I always wanted to approach this issue with some special pedantry, find official documents and information about my relatives. So far, I am satisfied with grandmother's memories.
Sisters Tamara and Klava Kebets were born in the village of Adasi, Petrikov district. It was from the city of Petrikov that the bearers of this family came to the village. It was a peasant family. They had their own hayfields, beehives with bees, cows, lambs, poultry and horses.
My great-grandmother went to school in the village 7 km from Adasei. At the beginning of the Great Patriotic War, she was 16 years old, and her future husband - great-grandfather Kohl was 17 years old. During the war, he stepped on the mine, after which he had to amputate his leg to the knee. He was a great woodworker, he built a large beautiful house, which we sometimes visit with the whole family, equipped him with his own furniture. His hand skillfully made benches, tables, chairs and various kitchen buffets. I know that the residents of the nearby villages have always made orders for furniture products from him.
And my great-grandmother Vera was an honest and hardworking woman, she was a back and a support for her entire extended family. They had four children with their grandfather. Among them my grandmother Klava, who later was born my mother Natasha.
I hope not to waste time and learn a lot about my family from relatives which are still alive.
This question has always fascinated me = This theme лучше
While I was a little girl, I looked with deep interest = Since my childhood I looked with deep...
photographs on which my ancestors were sealed = photographs of my ancestors (seal очень редко можно встретить в таком контексте)
But unfortunately = просто Unfortunately или даже Alas
And in my store don’t keep all of stories - не совсем поняла, что вы имеете ввиду. "Я не могу сохранить все эти истории в своей памяти/ Все эти истории не умещаются в моей голове"? - ответьте в комментарии
all of stories which told by my great-grandmother Vera and mother of my mother, grandmother Klava = all of stories which were told to me by my grandmother Klava and my great-grandmother Vera (возрастная градация и пассивный залог подправила)
they both died = both of them died на мой вкус лучше
And this dull bitter feeling comes to me from the realization that I can no longer ask them personally a lot = Since then some bitter feeling comes to me when I realize that I can't ask them any more questions in person (dull feeling не устойчивое выражение, вас не поймут + кое какие углы сладила)
My second grandmother = My other grandmother (а лучше grandma, granny чтобы избежать рифмы) - вы не заявляли что у вас две бабушки, так что порядковое числительное "вторая" не к месту
She is always willing to give me time and help to understand the question of where our roots originate = She is always willing to make time for me and to explain to me where our roots originate from.
However, I always wanted to approach this issue with some special pedantry, find official documents and information about my relatives. So far, I am satisfied with grandmother's memories = Although I'm very grateful to her, I've always wanted to scrutinize my family in a more serious way. I want to find some official documents and information about my relatives. Still I am more than satisfied with my grandmother's memories.

На этом силы мои подходят к концу, все на что меня хватило
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Елена Хроменко И я еще чуть-чуть добавлю. Явная ошибка в предложении "Among them my grandmother Klava, who later was born my mother Natasha".
was born = родилась. А вам надо написать "родила". Это будет так:
"...who later gave birth to my mother Natasha"
Александр Кочеров Cпасибо вам большое за потраченное на меня время!
ТЕКСТ ОЧЕНЬ ТРУДЕН К ПОНИМАНИЮ. НАПИШИТЕ ПО-РУССКИ ВАРИАНТ ТЕКСТА. ЭТО РАССКАЗ О ВАШЕЙ СЕМЬЕ?

I’d like to tell you a few words about the history of my family. This question has always fascinated me. While I was a little girl, I looked with deep interest at the old black-and-white photographs on which my ancestors were sealed, listened to the stories of my grandmothers about their childhood spent in one of the villages of the Belarusian Polesie - Adasi.
But unfortunately human memory is short-lived. And in my store don’t keep all of stories which told by my great-grandmother Vera and mother of my mother, grandmother Klava. Several years ago they both died. And this dull bitter feeling comes to me from the realization that I can no longer ask them personally a lot.
My second grandmother, Klava's sister, Toma is still alive. She is always willing to give me time and help to understand the question of where our roots originate. However, I always wanted to approach this issue with some special pedantry, find official documents and information about my relatives. So far, I am satisfied with grandmother's memories.
Sisters Tamara and Klava Kebets were born in the village of Adasi, Petrikov district. It was from the city of Petrikov that the bearers of this family came to the village. It was a peasant family. They had their own hayfields, beehives with bees, cows, lambs, poultry and horses.
My great-grandmother went to school in the village 7 km from Adasei. At the beginning of the Great Patriotic War, she was 16 years old, and her future husband - great-grandfather Kohl was 17 years old. During the war, he stepped on the mine, after which he had to amputate his leg to the knee. He was a great woodworker, he built a large beautiful house, which we sometimes visit with the whole family, equipped him with his own furniture. His hand skillfully made benches, tables, chairs and various kitchen buffets. I know that the residents of the nearby villages have always made orders for furniture products from him.
And my great-grandmother Vera was an honest and hardworking woman, she was a back and a support for her entire extended family. They had four children with their grandfather. Among them my grandmother Klava, who later was born my mother Natasha.
I hope not to waste time and learn a lot about my family from relatives which are still alive.
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