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In one day > One day

there will be a counselor > there would be (согласование времен)

It's strange that she, too, will be with us, but probably she is also interested
>> It was strange that she would be with us too, but probably she was also interested

After, we looked > Then (after требует после себя продолжения)

my nose blew > my nose bled, а лучше my nose started bleeding

from the nose > from my nose

All of the scared left the bathroom and left me
>> Everyone freaked out and ran out of the bathroom leaving me alone

she noticed there WAS something

Was this a ghost in fact, I do not know for sure
>> I do not know for sure if it was really a ghost

After several days of this night > A few days later

someone turns on and off the light > someone turned the light on and off

The switch itself switched on and off! > The switch clicked itself on and off

I woke UP one of my... (up обязателен)

I saw the toys of one of the girls in the room become tied up and move (I saw how - калька с русского)

Не аs a child, а when a child. Дальше не читал, слишком длинный текст.

Немного добавлю:

we shook our heads - we nodded.
The leader, lit the candles and THEN said something
the girls pointed a finger TO the mirror,
Something like a ghost or A spirit.
strange things began to happen in OUR room.
After a few hours - a few hours later,
And at this time, - And this time
I saw how the toys of one of the girls - I saw how one of the girls' toys

Лично я ошибок не вижу. Да и текста тоже.

,или, все же,