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Question

Every year many people celebrate a special holiday - City Day. 
This holiday commemorates the date of city foundation. 
Interestingly, that many cities celebrate its days in the period from October to March, and nowhere main events happen on weekdays.
City Day is an annual celebration of almost all cities. 
City Day is usually a very massive celebration and it is inferior only to the Day of the Country. 
It touches on all the inhabitants of each city.
Many people participate in various festive events on this day. 
Everybody can observe parades and holiday concerts.
And City Day usually ends with fireworks.

Антон · Accepted Answer

Интересно, а в чём заключалась проверка Станиславы? Возможно, я невнимательно читала, но различий и правок я не увидела. Зато ошибки все остались в неизменном виде. Одно its days чего стОит.

Руслан · Answer

Every year many people celebrate a special holiday - City Day. 
This holiday commemorates the date of city foundation. 
Interestingly, that many cities celebrate its days in the period from October to 
March, and nowhere main events happen on weekdays.
City Day is an annual celebration of almost all cities. 
City Day is usually a very massive celebration and it is inferior only to the Day of the Country. 
It touches all inhabitants of each city.
Many people participate in various festive events on this day. 
Everybody can observe parades and holiday concerts.
And City Day usually ends with fireworks.

Евгений · Answer

Interestingly enough, many cities celebrate these days between October and March. Дальше уже не понятно предложение.