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I celebrated New Year in the restaurant. I celebrated with my parents and ours friends. I did not like this New Year because was very boring. Also music in the restaraunt was old-fashioned. After restaraunt we watched fireworks. Then we went to home and went to bed. 
On New Years holiday I visited my grandparents and my friends. Also we went to skating ring with my parents. 
My parents presented me on New Year ring and chain.

Натали · Accepted Answer

I had a New Year party in the restaurant. I was there with my parents and our friends. I did not like this party because it was very boring. And besides, the music in the restaurant was old-fashioned. After the party we went to watch the fireworks. Then we returned home and went to bed. 
On New Year's holidays I visited my grandparents and my friends. My parents and I also went to the skating rink. I received a ring and a chainlet as New Year gifts from my parents.

Александр Карлин · Answer

I celebrated New Year in the restaurant. I celebrated with my parents and ours friends. I did not like this New Year because it was very boring. Also music iwas old-fashioned in the restaraunt . After restaraunt we have watched fireworks. Then we went home and went to bed. 
On New Years holiday I visited my grandparents and my friends. Also we went to skating ring with my parents. 
They presented me on New Year ring and chain. 
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