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mistakes:
1. but there are some people WHO DON`T EVEN THINK ABOUT their OWN health.
2. they claim/suppose that they will be always strong...
3. I can`t agree with that/ I can`t agree with their point of view, because our ...
4. ..we need get rid of eating fast/junk food, instead spend more time doing sport/devote more time for doing sport.
5. we must refuse of/ give up bad habits.
6. the way we live influences on our health.
7. everything is in our hands/our future is in our hands

Health is very important for all people. But there are some people WHO don't think about THEIR own health. They think that THEY WILL ALWAYS BE strong and healthy. I think they are wrong. Because our life and health depend ON us. First of all we need TO STOPeating _ fast food. And we must spend more time _ doing sport. Also we must GIVE UP all OUR BAD habits. Our WAY of life DETERMINES our health. _ Everything IS in our hands...

а вообще вместо must лучше сказать should - менее категорично и более употребительно

Health is very important for all people. But there are some people WHO don't think about their own health. They think that THEY will always be strong and healthy. I think they are wrong, because our life and health depend ON us. First of all we need TO refuse eating fast food. And we should spend more time on sport. Also we must refuse addictions. Our way of life makes our health. Everything is in our hands...

Health is very important for all people. But there are some people which don't think about own health. They think that always will be strong and healthy. I think they are wrong. Because our life and health depend of us. First of all, we need refuse to eat fast food. And we must spend more time for doing sport. Also we must give up harmful habits. Our order of life makes our health. The everything in our hands..

Влад (corrected)

"Health is very important for all people. But there are some people WHO don't think about THEIR own health. They think that THEY WILL ALWAYS BE strong and healthy. I think they are wrong. Because our life and health depend ON us. First of all we need TO STOP eating _ fast food. And we must spend more time _ doing sportS. Also we must GIVE UP all OF OUR BAD habits. Our WAY of life DETERMINES our health. _ Everything IS in our hands..."