Кто владеет в совершенстве английским языком, проверьте сочинение на ошибки

1Some people work to feed their families
2 I think this is A normal phenomenon.
3 Everyone has TO provide HIMSELF WITH food, clothes and a lot of other things HE need S HIMmselF.
4 A Job is the main source of money.
5 people have TO work if they want to live, because no one will work for you.
6 But there are such people, who regard their work as a purpose of their life.
7 Work is like obsession to them.
8 I can't imagine, how people can work hard for the minimAL salary FOR THE WHOLE day and feel satisfied.
9 They remain at work till evening while others get tired and go home.
10 However, I respect people, who can't live without work.
11 They need to feel USEFUL.
12 But I can't understand those, who prefer working even ON THE New Year'S DAY.

2. T think this is normal (все-таки явление и phenomenon не полностью синонимичны)
3. Everyone has to put food on the table, buy clothes and... they need. Если говорить he/himself etc, вы впадаете в сексизм.
4. Work
5. Скажите все with you: You'll have to work to survive because no one will do that for you.
6. There are people who ...the purpose...(не надо расставлять запятые в сложных предложениях, как по- русски, скорее всего, их там быть не должно)
8. minimal... day in, day out

9. However, ..
11.?
12...on New Year's eve

feed earn the living for their families
a normal phenomenon
has to
work
5. will would
But there are such people who regard their work as the purpose of their life.
11. ??
12. evening of December 31
Без русского текста некоторые места непонятны.

1. Most of the people need to work to earn their living.
2. That is the normal phenomenon to happen.
3. Everyone has to earn their living in order to have all necessities and even more.
4. The main source of income is job that we handle on a daily basis.
5. People have to work hard in order to survive.
6. But there are some people that the main aim of their life is work.
7 Work is like obsession to them.
8. Some of the people are satisfied from their job even though they get little paid.
9. They spend a lot of overtime hours at job to reach their goals.
10. I respect the people that used to work hard.
11. They get satisfaction by being useful at their job by getting more experience and higher qualification.
12. I respect them, but it is difficult for me to understand them, when they are working in New Year's Eve instead have a nice party with their families and friends.