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Один бизнесмен накопил состояние, составляющее три миллиона золотых долларов. Он решил, что возьмет себе год отдыха от работы и поживет в роскоши, которую мог себе позволить благодаря своему богатству.
Но не успел он принять это решение, как к нему спустился Ангел Смерти.
Будучи профессиональным торговцем он решил любым способом уговорить Л -гела Смерти, чтобы тот продал ему немного времени.
Отчаявшись, богач сделал Ангелу предложение:
— Дай мне еще три дня жизни, и я отдам тебе треть моего состояния, один миллион долларов золотом.
Ангел отказался.
— Хорошо, оставь мне еще два дня жизни, и я отдам тебе две трети своих денег, два миллиона золотых долларов.
Ангел снова отказался.
— Дай мне всего один день, чтобы еще раз насладиться красотой этой земли и провести немного времени с семьей, которую я так долго не видел, и я отдам тебе всё, что имею. Три миллиона золотых долларов.
Но Ангел был непоколебим.
Наконец, человек спросил, может ли Ангел дать ему немного времени, чтобы написать прощальную записку? Это желание было удовлетворено.
«Правильно используйте время, которое отведено вам для жизни, — писал он. Я не смог купить даже часа жизни за три миллиона золотых долларов. Проверьте, прислушавшись к своему сердцу, все ли вещи, окружающие вас, обладают действительной ценностью».

One businessman saved up a fortune, making three million gold dollars. He decided to take one year of rest from work and to live in luxury. But he had no time to make this decision and Angel of Death gone down to him. The man was a professional dealer and he tried to solve angel of death any way to sale him the time.
Despaired rich man has made a proposal for Angel of Death:
-Give me even 3 days of a life and I’ll give you 1/3 of my fortune – one million gold dollars.
Angel has refused.
-Well, give me even 2 days and I’ll give you 2/3 of my money, 2 millions gold dollars!
Angel has refused again.
-Give me one more day for to take pleasure in beauty of this world, to spend a few time with my family which I so long didn’t see, and I will give you all that I have!
But the angel was unshakable.
At last, the man asked, could the Angel give him a little time for write farewell note ? This wish was satisfied.
«Correctly use the time which you have for a life, — he wrote. I couldn’t buy even an hour of a life for three million gold dollars. Check up, having listened to the heart, whether all things surrounding you, possess a real value».
Ace D
Ace D
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1. One businessman saved up a fortune of three million gold dollars. (хотя что такое золотые доллары я не знаю, наверно, все же доллары в золоте - тогда in gold)
2. He decided to take a 1-year's vacation from work to live it in luxury.
3. No sooner had he made this decision than Angel of Death went down to him.
4. Being a professional merchant he decided to persuade angel of death at any price to sell him some time.
5. Hopeless, the rich man made Angel of Death an offer:
6. - Give me 3 days more to life and I’ll give you 1/3 of my fortune – one million dollars in gold.
7. Angel refused.
8. - Ok, give me 2 more days and I’ll give you 2/3 of my money, 2 millions dollars in gold!
9. Angel refused again.
10. - Give me one more day to enjoy beauty of this world, to spend some time with my family which I have not seen for so long, and I will give you all I have!
11. But Angel was firm.
12. At last, the man asked, if Angel could give him some time to write a farewell note.
This wish was satisfied.
13. Use the time that is given to you in a right way, — he wrote.
14. I couldn’t buy even an hour of life for three million dollars in gold.
15. Check it, listen to your heart, if all the things around you have the real value».

Не ручаюсь, что совсем без ошибок - второй час ночи как никак.. .
Но в том варианте, что было. . там и с временами и с артиклями и с предлогами путаница.
Если есть вопросы, задавайте :)
Дмитрий Черноштан
Дмитрий Черноштан
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Ace D Спасибо за реальную помощь!
Голивууд-курит!!! !
Клааасссс!!!
вобщем почти что надо но много соковости например Correctly use the time which you have for a life
так навороченно например use the time right which is given for life ну и ещё нескольно таких случаев
Олег Туркин
Олег Туркин
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Ace D если не сложно, подкорректируй и остальные случаи. Спасибо
One businessman saved up a fortune, making three million gold dollars. He decided to take one year of rest from work and to live in luxury. But he hardly had time to make this decision as an Angel of Death gone down to him. The man was a professional dealer and he tried to persuade the angel to sale him some time.
In despair the rich man has made a proposal to the Angel of Death:
- Give me only 3 days of my life and I’ll give you 1/3 of my fortune – one million gold dollars.
Angel had refused.
- Well, give me then 2 days and I’ll give you 2/3 of my money, 2 millions gold dollars!
Angel had refused again.
- Give me a day to take pleasure in the beauty of this world, to spend some time with my family that I didn’t see so lone, and I will give you all that I have!
But the angel was unshakable.
At last, the man asked if the Angel could give him a little time to write a farewell note? This wish was satisfied. The note was:
«Correctly use the time which you have for a life. I couldn’t buy even an hour of my life for three million gold dollars. Check up having listened to the heart, whether all things surrounding you possess a real value».
Вот мой вариант: One businessman has saved up a condition, making three million gold dollars. He has decided, that takes to itself year of rest from work and will live in luxury which presumed thanks to the riches.
But he has not had time to make this decision as to it has gone down Angel Smerti.
Being the professional dealer he has solved any way to persuade L-gela Death that that has sold to him a few time.
Having despaired, the rich man has made Angela the proposal:
- Give to me even three days of a life, and I will give you third of my condition, one million dollars gold.
Angel has refused.
- Well, leave to me even two days of a life, and I will give you two thirds of money, two million gold dollars.
Angel has again refused.
- Give to me only one day once again to take pleasure in beauty of this earth and to spend a few time with a family which I so long did not see, and I will give you everything, that I have. Three million gold dollars.
But Angela was unshakable.
At last, the person has asked, whether can give Angela to it to a few time to write a farewell note? This desire has been satisfied.
«Correctly use time which is taken away to you for a life, - he wrote. I could not buy even hour of a life for three million gold dollars. Check up, having listened to the heart, whether all things surrounding you, possess a real value».