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Письмо по-английски, проверьте пожалуйста на ошибки!

Здравствуйте, мне задали написать письмо про любой музей.
Я написала, попыталась без ошибок, но я не уверена до конца.
Проверьте, пожалуйста!

"Once, when I was in the 3rd class, I went to Charles Darvin's museum. Charles Darvin was an English naturalist. He spoke that all people occurred from a monkey many years ago. In this museum there are a lot of different stuffed animal. They are made very well, and are similar to live animals.
In a museum I was long ago, but still I remember many exhibits. My class very much liked this excursion. I would like to visit there again.
I advise also to you to go to this interesting museum.
Write me then the opinion. It is very interesting to me."
(это часть письма)
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Юрис Камалеев
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Once, when I was in the 3rd GRADE, I went to Charles Darvin's museum. Charles Darvin was an English naturalist. He ASSERTED that all people DESCENDED from APES many years ago. There are a lot of different stuffed animals in this museum (ваш вариант построения предложения не подходит, так как это типично русское построение) They are made very well, and LOOK LIKE live animals.
I was in THE (a не подходит, так как мы уже знаем про какой именно музей идет речь) museum long ago, but I STILL remember many exhibits. My class liked this excursion VERY MUCH. I would like to visit this museum again.
I ALSO advise you to VISIT this interesting museum.
Write me then the opinion. It is very interesting to me.
Владимир Никитин
Владимир Никитин
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Once, when I was in the 3rd grade, I went to Charles Darvin's museum with my class . Charles Darvin was an English naturalist. He made ​​the discovery that all people are evolved from apes many centuries ago. In this museum there are a lot of different stuffed animal. They are made very well, and they look as live animals.
In a museum I was long ago, but I still remember many exhibits. Me and my classmates liked this excursion very much. I would like to visit there again.
I advise also to you to go to this interesting museum.
Write me then the opinion. It is very interesting to me."
Давид Казарян
Давид Казарян
53 213

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